1 gig 50 word Variation of the previous script [ The lines are slightly different ]
Voice style: for Zaydimar: from s sample page Generally a slightly lower pitch than most of your samples – probably close to your speaking voice pitch” ): seductive, husky, silky tones; doesn’t have to be husky ( or seductive) all the way through; key, is a mature adult woman; with deliberate pacing of speech; indicating gravitas ** .
** Definitions: gravitas: dignity, seriousness, or solemnity of manner.
Pronounciations of Fictional Names*:
Zaydimar:( Zay ( –ay as in ‘Pay‘) di (‘I ‘as in ‘dig’) mar ( ‘ar’ as in ‘scar‘)
Ral’Jun: Ral (‘Ral ‘as in ‘Pal‘) Jun ( -‘un‘ as in ‘racoon‘ : ‘joon‘)
Suathra: Soo- oth ( as in moth) Ra ( as is para )
Scheherazade: Shu ( as in shut) hair uh zod
Matriok: May tree ock ( as in clock)
* All Names original, except Scheherezade.
Foreword for Voice Actress:
Generally, rated Pg -13. In a middle eastern land**
The transformation of a character from survivor,( doing something she despises to stay alive), to an accomplished arena-athlete, and war-hero.
She discovers she has an elemental ability to influence the weather on an epic scale, and thus tip the balance in kingdom hierarchies. She uses her power for good, being true to herself, and demonstrating compassion, and concern for her new friends, and companions.
Becoming Zaydimar the Champion***.
[This is a brief segment of her origin story, and samples from various Chapters in “Zaydimar’s Quest”**** .]
*the titular character of Zaydimar’s Quest.
**similar to Sir Richard Francis Burton’s Arabian nights, and moves to medieval, and fantasy themes. A colorful adventure,
*** She becomes a ‘Matriok‘ – leader, and is known primarily as such in other stories.
**** Zaydimar’s Quest is her origin story.
B. Zaydimar’s loathed Job.
C. Zaydimar rescues her friend, and escapes.
D. Arena Champion Zaydimar
E. Zaydimar – Militia Hero
F. Matriok Zaydimar
Relevant Back story:
VI. Zaydimar’s Disguises as an Executioner
In the atmosphere of terror and despair, Zaydimar, seeks to find a way to escape Ral’Jun. She has observed the executioners are demoralized by Suathra‘s regular elimination of members of the palace. She offers to take the job of an executioner, from a new young man, who has moral qualms** about the job :* Jased.
**Definition:Qualms: an uneasy feeling of doubt, worry, or fear, especially about one’s own conduct; a misgiving.
He is a small-framed but wiry country farmer, and Zaydimar is a large-boned, husky farmer – they are approximately the same build to unsuspecting eyes. Zaydimar disguises as Jased, and he coaches her on the duties, shift change, passwords, and how to act to avoid detection.
* (it enabled his family to afford medicines for his dying sister)
Jased escapes Ral’jun, disguised as livestock trader and takes a mule and a cart to Aravek, getting a job in the arena games.
VII. Zaydimar Loathes her job as Executioner
It is then Zaydimar‘s task to carry out Suathra‘s nefarious executions. Each night, after executing a girl from the harem ( once a week), Zaydimar is deeply guilt stricken, and has a sleepless night, crying herself to sleep; thinking of her family back home, and how she wound up being an executioner. She feels distanced from the joy within her – once so easy to find, now buried beneath the weight of her unfulfilling tasks.
Original Concepts/ Characters(Intellectual Property):
Jased: supporting male actor
Daugrove: Giant, steroid pumped up, canine humanoid hybrid, the size of a Jumbo elephant – that teleports in the proximity of a target, but moves with lumbering, slow steps.
Ral’Jun: A middle eastern patriachy, usurped by Suathra.
Aravek: Port city in Erydeth
Matriok: A Female Leader of a nation; elected by popular demand.
Nashona: A bucolic farming nation. ( definitions: bucolic: relating to the pleasant aspects of the countryside and country life )
Umbreed: An alien parasite, from another dimension, that takes a human host, and makes them immutable**, but bears influence over their will*.
( **Definitions: immutable: undying; metabolic stasis.)
Tabruo: A mehkt – giant domestic cat; slightly larger than the size of a big horse.
Nayka: Suathra’s Umbreed-host troopers.
*The unspoken reason, that Suathra is decapitating the palace members, is to use their headless bodies as hosts for the Umbreed, which regenerates the missing limbs, and ensures the Umbreed dominates their actions – Suathra has an artifact that enables her to influence the umbreed, and thus, control the umbreed-human hosts. So her eliminating the Palace staff, is to turn them into her personal alien/parasite host army.
Character Self Descriptive Monologue:
[As narrative to a visual novel in Renpy.]
Excerpt Segment A: “Intro”
Dialogue: for Zaydimar in “quotations”
Zaydimar: “ I’m Zaydimar. “
[Vocal Direction: First phrase is said mysteriously, and transcendental – as someone looking out into a sandstorm, and remaining serene. The character has an edge of a silky, feminine aura, that is enticing and rich, but also contains a matronly groundedness – which others seek her counsel and leadership from.
Application: At opening of a landscape, distance view of the middle eastern architecture of Ral’jun, the narrative voice over, is accompanied by a soundtrack. ]
Zaydimar: “ Ral’jun’s Executioner,… to escape my own execution,…”
[ Vocal directions: First Phrase, explaining something one is ashamed of ( like a mistake, or cruel behavior), slightly remorseful, but matter of fact – conveying that she had no sense of a choice: she had to survive.
“ Executioner of Ral’jun” is said like a prestigious, or lofty position: for example: “ I became the Chairman of the Grand- Council‘.” As an impersonation, of the pretentiousness** associated with that role.
** Definitions: Pretentiousness: attempting to impress by affecting greater importance, talent, culture, etc., than is actually possessed
A deeper voice, than usual, just to emphasize that title – with a sweeping, and longer duration for the syllables, stretching out its enunciation**,( slightly), to signify a reference to a grand expectation, (invoked by the title).
**Definition:Enunciation: the act of pronouncing words. Make sure your enunciationis clear when ordering in a restaurant so you don’t get roasted lamb when you really wanted toast with jam.
Second phrase: Said like an excuse, (or explanation) – with entreaty**; like a mother explaining to a child why they couldn’t afford a bicycle for his birthday. A hint of shame, born of desperation – a plea for understanding and compassion, for her shortcomings.
**Definition: entreaty: an earnest or humble request.
Emphasis on ‘ own execution’ -rising tone; for example: “ We ate the starving cow, to prevent our own starvation. “]
Zaydimar: “,.. their heads , lived in my nightmares”
[ Vocal directions: First phrase, ‘haunted‘, almost trembling with sorrow ( or shame). Voice decrescendos**, and becomes staccato***. 2 sec pause before the last phrase – to compose oneself, after speaking of a traumatic, all-time low, (where someone loses a piece of their dignity, and invariably, starts to break down and cry, if ever they speak of themselves in that situation).
**Definitions: Decrescendo: an indication to gradually decrease the volume of the music
***Definitions: staccato: with each note sharply detached or separated from the others.
Application: flashback scene, waking in a cold sweat, from nightmares of her victims faces staring.
Vocal directions: Second phrase, remembering something terrifying, evoking in the listener the magnitude of how the speaker was haunted by nightmares ( a tone expressing, lost sleep, misery, agony; a whispered, foreboding** tone, like someone not wanting to speak about it in a normal voice). Whispering about it, as if trying to hide from it. For example: “ The Troll is sleeping in the kitchen’. (voice , slightly lowered to a whisper, so the troll won’t hear) ]
** definitions: Foreboding: fearful apprehension; a feeling that something bad will happen.implying or seeming to imply that something bad is going to happen.
“Like Scheherazade’s Caliph, married daily”
[ vocal directions: First phrase silky overtones – the beginning of an exotic story, resonant duration between first half of sentence and last.
Last half as though speaking matter of factly about something novel,( and interesting; like reporting colonists on Mars have had their first baby) ]
Zaydimar: “Their stories unamusing ,..”
[ Vocal direction: The tone goes from storyteller/pacifying tone, to a premonition-for- something (a warning tone); pause, after the last word; said with a rising tone. For example: “ If the cooling system failed,..” ( preceding a terrible outcome such as, “,.. the space shuttle would burst into flames.”).
The tone invites listeners to speculate what’s next. Creating momentary suspense. Drawing the listener to pay close attention to each word, as the story gets more bizarre. ]
[Vocal Direction: Drawn out duration , exaggerated ‘Cartoony‘ sound effect: 1 and a half seconds long.
Application: For accompanying hand across the neck gesture – like a cartoon character making a sound effect to signify being killed, ‘urrkk’, or ‘uhhgh.’or something similar – like Daffy duck in Looney Toons. ]
Zaydimar: ”,.. it was:” off with her head.!”
[ Vocal directions: last phrase said as though telling a cautionary tale, emphasizing the danger that befell others, to frighten the listener, to beware . Slightly increased volume, crescendo** on last three words – slightly imitating the tone of hostility the villainess used to say it. Like someone transitioning into an impersonation.
**Definitions:Crescendo: with a gradual increase in loudness.
Application: Flashback scene, showing the Villainess giving a death sentence – using the archetypal** phrase. ( similar to the Red Queen in Alice in Wonderland: depicting Suathra as an over the top tyrant; like Cruella De ville, or any Disney villainess ]
**Definitions: archetypal: very typical of a certain kind of person or thing.recurrent as a symbol or motif in literature, art, or mythology.relating to or denoting an original that has been imitated.
Excerpt Segment B: “Zaydimar’s Loathed Job”
Zaydimar: “ I wasn’t beheaded,..like other girls ”
[ Vocal direction: First phrase, relating an unusual tale, expected to be interesting to the listener, (because of it’s unexpected turn of events); as though expecting the audience to be incredulous, using the tone: “You won’t believe it, but I won the lottery.”
Second phrase: conveying an ordinary occurrence was not the outcome. For example : “ I didn’t get a ticket,..” prelude to “ ,..instead the cop gave me a warning.” An implied sense of how inexplicably fortunate the person telling the story feels, for being spared the normal outcome.]
Zaydimar: “ My job: ”
[ Vocal direction: a sigh of weariness, or admission that it wasn’t such a perfect solution; having its drawbacks, and new problems.
Application: Image transition from Zaydimar front view – in harem costume; shrugging at her turn of fortune, to Zaydimar in executioner costume – depicted, in contrast to first pose; rear ¾ view- turning out of corner of eye ( like Vin Diesel XXX poster; tricep/traps/lat view, ) standing, in an imposing posture, dressed in a black hood, leather kirtle**, boots, gloves ect,.]
** Definitions: Kirtle: a woman’s gown or outer petticoat.
- a man’s tunic or coat.
Zaydimar: “ ,.. chop off, their heads.”
[Vocal Direction: First phrase a grim and sober relating, of something confessed from the past – (expected to be received poorly, but stated as a matter of fact, for the sake of honesty)
Second phrase ( Italicized phrase), said with a tone of irony** / surprise; rising tone. Different tone than the first half – signifying the turnabout, (vocally). For example, “ I didn’t get hit by the water pistol like all the other kids, instead, I sprayed them with the water pistol.” – said solemnly***, (or more serious), to emphasize the importance the experience had for the speaker. Like, conveying “ you don’t understand, I wasn’t just a good boy, I was the preacher’s son.”]
** Definitions: Irony: the expression of one’s meaning by using language that normally signifies the opposite, typically for humorous or emphatic effect.a state of affairs or an event that seems deliberately contrary to what one expects and is often amusing as a result.
***Definitions: Solemnly: something done in a serious manner or in a way that reflects a ritual or tradition. An example of something that would be described as acting solemnlyis how we all should behave at a funeral. ]
Excerpt Segment C: “Zaydimar Rescues her Friend and Escapes”
Act I. Zaydimar Renounces her role as Executioner
[Insert flashback: ]
Zaydimar : “Head on the block prisoner.”
[ Vocal direction: a cold, forceful, but detached/icy tone; an affected tone throughout the interrogation – reflecting the putting on of a role: ie,. Like Christian Bale’s Batman – (but NOT as over the top, guttural, or conspicuous; just an ominous, slightly hissing, grim-reaper tone; still clearly Zaydimar, and a feminine voice, just a little bit grimmer) ]
Zaydimar: “ Name?”
[ Vocal direction: demanding perfunctory questions, sounding like an ominous and menacing character.
Application: She is reading over a list of names, as part of procedure. The man answers, and she seems to recognize the name, faintly, not sure for what reason yet.]
[ Vocal Directions: Back, in grim-reaper character: she leans forward, and puts a black leather gloved hand on the prisoner’s shoulder, to reassure him. Being resourceful, she invents a pretense, to release her friend, (without drawing too much attention to her self or revealing herself).
Application: Zaydimar recognizes the individual as a friend. She is stunned, and looks side to side, to see if she is being observed. She asks the question to confirm. He answers, and she knows it is indeed her friend. She prepares to be resourceful; intent on saving her friend.]
Zaydimar: (laughter: ‘Chuckle’)” he, heh, he,.. “
[Vocal Directions: In grim reaper characters: Subdued laughter, that escapes, and is almost like a nervous phrase; for example, when someone can’t remember what they are talking about, and say ‘like’ repeatedly, or ‘um’. Volume decrescendos, trailing off – embarrassed, not wanting to draw more attention; squelching themselves within 3 syllables: conveying a tone of: “Innocent mistake; no hard feelings. ” like a non-specific apology. “ Application: The man, whispers ‘ ,.. Zaydimar?,…” – almost stammering in dis belief, whispering the question, in confidence; like someone visiting Santa Claus in the mall, then suspecting the actor is someone they know: “Uncle Bob? Is that you?” ]
50 words Total
Zaydimar: “I remember you from school.”
[ Vocal Directions: Her voice is now without the ominous tones, sounding like a friendlier person – who suddenly breaks character, to greet a close friend. A seemingly incongruous **gladness in her voice; remembering happier carefree times. The light streaming through an overcast sky, seems to confuse the prisoner.
**Definitions: Incongruous: not in harmony or keeping with the surroundings or other aspects of something.
Application: She is standing above him, in a legs wide apart position, still holding the Executioner’s scimitar, and smiling, as she seems to break from character, forgetting her costume, and just being herself: enjoying seeing her friend again. He however, doesn’t understand what is happening, since he doesn’t recognize her in the costume. ]
Zaydimar:“ …Your name’s not on the list. Ooops – Our mistake. “
[ Vocal Directions: Back, in grim-reaper character: she leans forward, and puts a black leather gloved hand on the prisoner’s shoulder, to reassure him. Being resourceful, she invents a pretense, to release her friend, (without drawing too much attention to her self or revealing herself).
Last phrase, a smiling, pandering customer service rep who is prepared to placate, and apologize for mistakes: an over the top, bright warm tone. Like a cartoon character, Disney, or kids show host.
Application: She sounds like a not very experienced actor, trying to act.; slightly conspicuous**. Her friend, kneeling over the block, looks up, and hesitantly starts to raise his head; then shiftily, looking to his right and left; with a suspicious look; like a rabbit ready to run. Zaydimar, (rather than responding), continues to pretend nothing unusual is going on, persisting to use the fabricated tone of a customer service representative. ]
** Definitions: Conspicuous: standing out so as to be clearly visible.attracting notice or attention.
Zaydimar: “You’re free to go. “
[ Vocal Directions: In grim reaper character: She looks side to side to see if any superiors are watching . Then nodding her head with a big smile, says her line – like someone who has been looking forward to return a favor, and be in the position to grant a boon, now finally getting a chance to do a good deed, is savoring it, and doing it with aplomb**.
** Definitions: Aplomb: self-confidence or assurance, especially when in a demanding situation.
Application: The man is helped to standing by Zaydimar, who removes his bonds. She gestures, then pushes him toward the stairs to descend the scaffold, and flee. Waving her hands like someone would shoo away a child or pet.]
Zaydimar:“Have a nice day, sorry for the inconvenience!”
[ Vocal Directions: Breaking from character: slipping, back to Zaydimar’s normal voice – for the first phrase: like the bright attitude in a Monty Python skit, (where Chris Palin is acting super agreeable, so that it is sort of humorously conspicuous. Or like Jim Carrey, speaking in super friendly tones, when it’s obvious to the audience, he feels otherwise); the humor, is in the incongruity of tone, with the setting.
The first phrase is said bright, and encouraging; like physician, or friendly telemarketer, or phone sales representative, (whose call is being monitored for quality assurance). As though it’s more for the sake of anyone listening, (to make things look ordinary, or proper).
The second phrase: back in grim reaper character:a slight crescendo, and vigor, that is winning – seemingly out of place in the setting. ( perhaps – like comedy shows, like Kristen Bell in the “The Good Place”, speaking with slightly exorbitant** zest***; (derived from daily vocal training, and sheer vocal power).
** Definitions: Exorbitant: to describe something that is really just too much!
*** Definitions: Zest: great enthusiasm and energy.
Application: Her friend looks stunned, (going from a meditative state of staying calm before the execution, resigned to it, to suddenly, an unexpected, turn of events, where he now needs to muster adrenaline to escape for his life). The expression on his face, shows that he hasn’t fully processed what has just transpired.
Each phrase said by Zaydimar; (who is disguised, and unrecognizable at the time) – is in a tone like a friendly fast food service, (instead of the expected monotonous fatigue expected from service staff; tired of ‘acting’ friendly, all day , every day. ) ]
57 words: sub total 109 words
Excerpt Segment D: “Arena Champion – Zaydimar”
Zaydimar: “ Villainous sorceress, Suathra, ensorcelled him. “
[ Vocal Direction: Telling a story in a Disney movie – in a soothing tone, like reading a book aloud to put the listener to sleep.
The first phrase, in a tone expressing disdain** for the villainess.
** Definitions: disdain: the feeling that someone or something is unworthy of one’s consideration or respect; contempt.
The name ‘ Suathra‘ said like a notorious villain, as though the word itself is ‘scary’.( For example, the way fans of WWF speak of intimidating characters, with some showmanship, implied character, and acting to emphasize an attitude, or reputation). Suathra, said chillingly, with a whispered, breathy hiss, making the word last a second longer than the pace of other spoken words. ( For example: “ I, am Draaacullaaa,…” (dracula, ) )
Last phrase, as though speaking of the unlikely. The tone, conveying the narrator’s feeling: “Can you believe it? “ ]
Zaydimar: “ Refusing to execute my friend,… “
[Vocal directions: Zaydimar in her normal Story teller voice, with gravitas, slight seductive quality. Setting up the enunciation of the following line. For example: “ Refusing to join the club, ..” in a rising tone, and “ we found other clubless people, and formed our own.” in a lowering tone. ”
Application: A narrative, as images depict the map of Ral’jun,( and the neighboring city, – like Indiana Jones: Raiders of the Lost Ark, showing the progress on the map, and a travel montage. ) ]
Zaydimar: “ ,… we escaped to a neighboring city,…”
[Vocal directions: Sounding like the start of a new chapter ( or new life. A tone that signifies freedom, and achieving a level of higher ground, and respite from former troubles. Like the beginning of a new adventure. ) The latter half of the sentence, sounding higher in pitch, lighter in tone, as though relaxing from a tense former situation.
Application: Zaydimar and her friend are depicted on camel-type creatures, riding to a land out of the desert – in a medieval type village. Signifying the second Act. ]
Zaydimar: “,… where I discovered: Arena Combat.”
[ Vocal directions : the first phrase is said as a premonition, for the emphasized last phrase: ‘arena combat’ – said as though something really enjoyable, exciting, and epic. Almost like the tone WWF announcers use to hype an event; almost an impersonation, more of a reflection, the tone shift, signaling the whole new world of ‘combat sports‘; a slightly lower tone, more intimidating, like reaching a beast within, a dormant animal side, that craves competition: For example: “ around the corner, was: a lamborghini “ or “ At the grocery store, I was in line behind ,… ( insert favorite celebrity )” . Sort of hallowed, respect, awestruck tones.
Application: Zaydimar, has been touring a new town, but when she walks into the amphitheatre (where gladiators are stretching, practicing, warming up, doing moves, brandishing weapons); there is a hushed sense of awe,- (being impressed, and excited, at this sport, that is within her skill set, and looks like something she is an expert at). Like a body builder, (or fitness aficionado), who sees a mega gym, (with fancy machines, and is really impressed, and inspired to try the new workout machines); it is a treat. ]
Zaydimar:“I was quite good.”
[ vocal directions: humbly, with a tone, understating her performance, (in a way, implying it was more than ‘good’). Emphasis on ‘quite’; using a silky tone, ( as in smooth, almost seductive, but without the over tone of overt sensuality). Preoccupied, recalling the full experience, as something great, but using words that are far simpler.
Application: Zaydimar is recalling her many victories, and is depicted with arm raised, and crowd roaring, as the announcer declares her champion. ]
Zaydimar: “ The crowd adored me. “
[Vocal directions: wistfully,( as an opera singer remembering her glorious youth, still stunningly attractive to 20 year olds, before reaching middle age). The tone for the word ‘adored‘ emphasized, by a rising tone and sustain of the word, for a duration of an extra second and a half: for example: “Frosted Flakes, taste Grrrreat!” – “ The crowd Adooored me.” The tone for ‘me’ , sounds beaming and self-satisfied, like someone who is hugging themselves, after doing something they and others are proud of.
Application: Zaydimar, is narrating, a montage of her most famous arena wins, and the moment of the crowd roaring; while she stands on the platform, arm upraised like a champion, and is given a gold medal. For Example: after a boxing match, after an olympic match, on the rewards podium; after someone wins on a televised talent show, singing show or awards ceremony.]
Excerpt Segment E: “Zaydimar – Militia Hero”
Zaydimar: “ When the city was attacked. I joined the militia”
[Vocal directions: First phrase: The tone reflects, recalling a time that was sudden and worrisome: for example: “When grandfather died, mom was really devastated, it took her three years to stop mourning.” (Like someone talking about a hurricane, or unexpected tragedy or stressful event).
Application: A depiction of horse riders, from Suathra, on a BlitzKrieg mission -( storming villages, with torches, leaping over walls; siege machines, bursting rubble, from cannon balls, and enemy flags waved viciously, from spear tips, as the villagers scatter in terror, some cut down, stumbling in the streets, people panicking, crying, and running for cover; until the city guard react to hold back the invaders, with a phalanx of shield bearers. ) ]
Vocal directions: Second phrase: Sounding like a Marines recruiting testimonial. The speaker is full of purpose, and determination, that inspires the listener to want to have similar qualities of character: implying that joining the militia, is something courageous and righteous. Zaydimar’s altruistic act, signifies her beginning to use her skills, to protect those around her; on her way to being worthy of Matriok.
Application: Image shows riders, clamping down helmet face plates, from their armored steeds( as they are assembled to ride to face Suathra’s invading horde). They appear competent and glorious. Zaydimar seems like a Valkyrie. A visual contrast to the former Arena brawler, and the foreboding Executioner outfit.]
Zaydimar: “ My fighting skills, brought freedom, protected the weaker.”
[ Vocal directions: First phrase, said like a military recruitment ad. She speaks confidently and matter of factly about where she came from, and where she went as part of the militia. The benefits are listed:
second phrase: ‘brought freedom!”, second word of phrase, said in increasing volume, with a joyous, proud emphasis. Coming from someone who feels redeemed from past mistakes and shame.
Third Phrase: said as noble virtues, evoking inspiration, and expressing gratitude for being in a role that was wholesome. Like someone sharing the way it feels, to do something for pure good intentions. A relief, and antidote to the way she felt when doing her loathsome former job as Executioner of Ral’Jun.
Application: Image shows a montage of the militia, (armored horse riders, rescuing fallen villagers, blocking the strikes of Suathra‘s invaders, and rushing in with shield, like a battering ram, to grab a fallen villager before rubble falls on them). ]
Zaydimar: “ The weak had the potential to be strong, I taught them. “
[Vocal directions: First phrase: Said reflectively, as though she had grown in maturity from soldier, to officer, and was now in a position to train militia persons. The first phrase said as though encouraging, like a coach, or personal trainer, giving a motivational speech. The words ‘weak’, and ‘strong’ are emphasized with a rising tone and and a ½ sec longer duration of enunciation. For example: a speech by a charismatic leader: “ One day, the poor, will hold hands with the rich, and walk side by side.” Indicating the two categories are being related.
Second phrase: ‘I’ emphasized, with slightly higher volume, and half second duration increase, indicating she ‘owned’ the new found leader ship role, and was declaring it with confidence, pride, and embracing the role as Teacher.
Application: First phrase: A view of soldiers coming to the training camp, looking out of shape – ie, Mulan, Disney cartoon movie. Followed by a training montage, and then standing in line, looking in shape, and ready.
Second phrase: View from behind the soldiers standing at attention, while Zaydimar is giving them a speech, (followed by the camera zooming in to a close shot of the smiling – visibly pleased leader). Visually demonstrating the different appearance, and state, of being a champion; how it contrasts with the former, as executioner. Zaydimar clearly was distressed as Executioner, and didn’t enjoy the task -now she clearly is pleased with being a leader, and enjoys training the weak, to be champions. ]
52 words: subtotal 161 words
Zaydimar: “ A Champion of the oppressed,..”
[Vocal directions: Said as part of a ‘run-on phrase‘, ( like a narrator; completing an origin story, and wrapping it up) with conviction, as a motto. ‘Champion’ said with a respectful flourish, like a lofty ideal she strives for – how others view her; which she tries to live up to.
Application: She stands in profile, like a dramatic patriotic image, next to a flag, with armor, and colorful ceremonial capes, and ribbons – like medieval pageantry**; For example, the way ‘Captain America’ is usually depicted. The noble soldier. Like a World War II ad, or radio recruitment commercial. ]
** Definitions: Pageantry: elaborate display or ceremony.
Zaydimar: “ ,…Zaydimar the Executioner: to the wicked. “
[Vocal directions: ‘Zaydimar‘ is said in a husky /silky tone, that shifts to a harder tone and slight volume crescendo, for ‘Ex-e-cu-tion -er’: each syllable enunciated clearly and deliberately; with a pause at the colon (: )Said in a tone of forceful ownership, of a lethal role.
Second phrase, directed with hostility toward the ‘wicked’ ; whispered, like a threat, made more ominous, by the resonating sustain of the word, said in a menacing tone; as though daring the wicked, through snarling, clenched teeth; implying the calm before a tsunamic unleashing of fury.
Application: She is depicted, with a superimposed image, from her Champion armor, to an overlay, in the executioner outfit – visually referencing her nefarious role; indicating, the lethality, is being directed at the ‘wicked’ : shown battling the hordes of Suathra’s Nayka* – armies). ]
* Black spider, alien host, Umbreed armies
Excerpt Segment F: “ Matriok Zaydimar”
Zaydimar: “As Matriok, I created a safe haven, for women, in oppressive patriarchal societies.”
[Vocal directions: First phrase: Said like a chairman before a committee, objectively speaking of weighty matters. Implying she is accustomed to the highest levels of political leadership.
Second phrase: said like a politician, describing their achievements. ‘Safe haven‘, and ‘for women‘ said in pleasant, reassuring, soothing tones. ( a rising tone).
Last phrase: ‘Oppressive’ is said with some disdain, ‘patriarchal societies‘ is said as though describing a third world country, or some obsolete, primitive and regressive anomaly.
Application: She is seen speaking in front of a crowd gathered in a temple, meeting hall, of women who are considering joining her nation of Nashona; where she is the current High Matriok. ]
Zaydimar: “ For those that would harm us, my arm is ready.”
[Vocal directions: Said, as though mature, not elderly, but slightly older than the early militia days, she is peaceful, and tries to preserve it with wise negotiations, but there is a steel remaining in her voice, expressed in the latter half of the first phrase, ‘ would harm us‘ ;
There is stillness ( a four second pause) lingering at the end of the first phrase; signifying, to the listener, the change of tone in the last phrase: for example : “you would prefer to stay on our friendly side, because the lioness, you won’t see coming, and is ready to rip your face off”.
A full, forceful enunciation of every syllable in the last phrase, like turning on a faucet, to high; demonstrating, the thunder can be brought, at any moment. Beware.
Application: Zaydimar stands in attention, like a salutatory motto**, which the new members of the tribe of Nashona, repeat. Signifying the expanding people whom she leads, and the growing forces of Zaydimar the Champion.]
** Definitions: Motto: a short sentence or phrase chosen as encapsulating the beliefs or ideals guiding an individual, family, or institution.
Zaydimar: “I am Zaydimar The champion.”
[Vocal directions: Signifying a rebirth, different purpose, a new role, purity and freshness. Like in Lord of the Rings, when asked by the companions who saw him disappear fighting the Balrog, and Gandalf responds: “ I am Gandalf the White.”
First phrase: “ I am Zaydimar..” sounds like the narrator at the intro.
Second Phrase: “.. The Champion.” said in a crescendo, with emphasis, on ‘Champion’. Said with pride, and flourish. Inspiring respect from the listeners, by virtue of her own self-respect.
Application: She looks to the worried officers in her troop, and the viewer, with a fist raised, like in the arena where she found her natural strength, – despite being 40 years older: as if to demonstrate: ‘ I am as strong as I ever was’. ( Indicating, the strength demonstrated, is of her character, her righteousness; undying; her immutable, unconquerable soul) . Despite time, loss, and grief, and weariness, and hardship, she remains, a Champion at heart.
Outnumbered, and a fresh legion of Umbreed hordes unleashed from a Portal, with most of her legions decimated – the fatigued loyal war generals of Nashona seem dubious, when Suathra, calls for a duel; between a Nashonan Champion and one of her alien Champions.
When Zaydimar sees there is no one from her forces able to face the monstrous Daugrove*, a dread settles into the War generals. A sense of defeat spreads like poison gas amongst the few Nashonans still standing on the battlefield. In this moment of doubt, she offers to confront the Daugrove – and rallies the circle of loyal generals, worried for her safety, by her assertion.
It is the attitude, from which they feel the impact of the declaration – at her age, and exhaustion from over night battle; they are nearly dizzy, and barely able to stand. Rather, than giving into fear, her example, motivates them. A nobility almost like martyrdom. Moves the remaining fatigued, to never give up.